Talk:750 Seventh Avenue/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Kusma in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kusma (talk · contribs) 08:19, 16 June 2022 (UTC)Reply

Reserving this one. Comments to follow in a few days at most. —Kusma (talk) 08:19, 16 June 2022 (UTC)Reply

Progress box and general comments

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Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed
  • Images are fine. No stability concerns.
  • No copyvio concerns, and the several sources I looked at were not paraphrased too closely.
  • Happy with neutrality, focus and broadness.
  • References are reliable, support the content appropriately and are nicely formatted.
  • Minor prose/lead issues below.

Putting on hold (mostly for my own internal accounting), expect this to be done soon! Nice work. —Kusma (talk) 11:19, 18 June 2022 (UTC)Reply

Content and prose review

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  • Lead: Suggest to lose the hyphens in financial-services and black-glass
  • Try to give a one-sentence summary of the reception section as well.
  • Site: Do you know how long the Rivoli was used as a movie theater? It is interesting that the source leaves it open whether the pediment was removed as a safety measure or to prevent landmark status to allow further redevelopment.
  • Architecture: in a geometrical layout what does that mean? (what would a non-geometrical layout look like?)
  • large signs behind the glass This confused me a little, I couldn't understand what kind of signs would be required on the inside ("no climbing this building dressed as spiderman"?) From the bit I looked at in the source, there is some requirement to have billboards or neon signs or something? The billboards do not seem to be behind the glass, but in front of it (or are we looking from the inside?). Please clarify.
  • I assume you don't know why there is a dispute about the size of the building – 4500 square meters is quite a discrepancy.
    • I actually do know the reason for the dispute, but if I added that reason into the article, it would be original research. Basically, gross floor area excludes things such as elevator shafts and mechanical space, of which there's about 50,000 square feet. Epicgenius (talk) 16:28, 18 June 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • Does the lobby no longer look like that? (why past tense?)
  • Development: Now I understand more about the "sign" story. Slightly reordering things might make this easier to understand (why does architecture come before development?)
    • I have clarified it a bit more.
  • The Solomons had originally hired William A. White/Grubb & Ellis as the brokers, but they subsequently hired Cushman & Wakefield as the new brokers in January 1990. maybe don't repeat "hired ... as the brokers" but use something like "replaced them by Cushman & Wakefield".
  • How did the Stratford Wallace story end?.
  • Completion and insolvency: 9×10^6 sq ft nothing against scientific notation, but it seems a but out of place here ("9 million sq ft"?).
  • A president of a Spanish bank offered to pay this almost makes it sound like he was acting in personal capacity.
  • Occupancy and sales: Newmark Real Estate was looking for tenants Why are they suddenly involved?
  • it still needed around 250,000 sq ft (23,000 m2) who is "it" in this sentence?
  • the concentration of so many workers in a small area had become a liability I'm not sure "liability" is the best way to describe this. The NY Times just suggests that some people thought it was not a good idea to have all your workers in one place. It seems more about risk mitigation?
  • Link Junior's. Also link Ruby Foo earlier?
  • Reception: The Wall Street Journal also says "poor 750 Seventh Avenue falls utterly dark at sundown, although a string of lights was supposed to pulsate down its spiraling projections." Anything about these lights from anywhere else? It sounds like an interesting idea that was not pursued?
    • The lights probably refer to the large signage that was required on the facade, but I can't tell for sure. This commentary was prior to the installation of the large billboards. I didn't find any other commentary about the lighting, but presumably it was scrapped after the building failed to find more than one tenant. Epicgenius (talk) 16:16, 19 June 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • I don't think the Death Star link is appropriate. The source is talking about 4 Times Square, right?

@Kusma: Thanks for the detailed review; I really appreciate it. I have now addressed all the points you've brought up. Epicgenius (talk) 16:16, 19 June 2022 (UTC)Reply

  • My concerns have been addressed, promoting now. I find googling for '"4 Times Square" "Death star"' or '"Conde Nast building" "Death Star"' fairly convincing, but it is probably safer not to mention if you think there is reasonable doubt. —Kusma (talk) 18:05, 19 June 2022 (UTC)Reply