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Reviewer: Harper J. Cole (talk · contribs) 12:26, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply


I'll take on this review. They usually take me a day or two.--Harper J. Cole (talk) 12:26, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Lead section

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  • [Teams and crews were competing in seven rallies...] Simple past tense is standard: {Teams and crews competed in seven rallies...}
  • [Originally thirteen events were planned, but with more events being cancelled due to the pandemic, and some new ones added as replacement, eventually seven events were held.] Slightly awkward wording, particularly the word "more", if it's referring to the cancellation of events that were originally scheduled. I also think "replacement" should be pluralised, as it refers to more than one replacement event: {Originally thirteen events were planned, but with several events being cancelled due to the pandemic, and some new ones added as replacements, eventually seven events were held.}
  • Also, if I understand the situation correctly, originally fourteen events were planned, with Chile being removed due to political unrest to drop the total to thirteen, followed by the pandemic making further changes. If so then "originally" should be replaced with "prior to the pandemic"

Calendar

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  • [...but the calendar had been reduced to seven rounds...] Again, use simple past tense: {...but the calendar was reduced to seven rounds...}

Calendar changes

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  • [The event is to be based...] Past tense: {was to be based}
  • [...had expressed interest in hosting the event...] This should be "hosting an event", as each race is its own event.
  • [...which facilitates the opportunity...] Past tense : "facilitated".
  • [Further calendar options may include...] Past tense: "included".
  • [...Rally Sardegna was moving forward...] Past tense: "moved".

Summary

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  • [Loeb and Elena will contest...] Past tense: "contested".
  • [...used for 2021 season...] Missing "the" before "2021".
  • [Katsuta will contest...] Past tense: "contested".
  • [Latvala will contest two events] It looks like he only contested one, so something like, "Latvala planned to contest two events".
  • [...is set to contest an expanded programme of nine rounds in 2020] Should be past tense, but also this is out of date, as there were not nine rounds to contest.

Sporting regulations

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  • Have the changes in the first paragraph taken place? Past tense needed throughout if so.

Opening rounds

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  • [the eight final stage] Should be plural ("stages").
  • [...their and teammates...] Should be "and their teammates", I think?

Season resumption

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  • [...half-year hiatus by the COVID-19 pandemic...] Should be "caused by".
  • [...determined to vanquish their home soil...] Sounds a little awkward, as though they're planning to destroy the soil. I'd suggest, "...prevail on their home soil..."
  • [rough roads and rock storm] Should be "rock storms" (assuming there was more than one such storm).

Closing rounds

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  • [...in the WRC history...] Simply "in WRC history" would be standard.
  • [...which spelt trouble in all terms...] Should this read, "spelt trouble for all teams"?
  • [The other major retirement of the rally is...] Past tense: "was".
  • [...a limit-visibility issue...] Should be "limited-visibility", unless this is a specific rallying term I'm not familiar with.
  • [...Hyundai had a 2–3 finish this weekend...] Avoid present tense. I'd recommend, "Hyundai had a 2–3 finish in the final weekend".

FIA World Rally Championship for Manufacturers

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  • [...are taken into account...] Past tense: "were".

Notes

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  • [The running date of Rally Argentina was initially scheduled to hold between 30 April to 3 May.] Awkward phrasing. I'd recommend, {The running dates of Rally Argentina were initially scheduled to be 30 April to 3 May.}
  • [Every crew that enters...] Past tense: "entered".
  • [...is eligible to score points...] Past tense: "was eligible".

Summary

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  • The vast majority of issues are with changing to the past tense now that this event is no longer active. Overall, it's a well-structured and -sourced article. I'll await your response.--Harper J. Cole (talk) 15:40, 6 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
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