Talk:2020 Treviso Open/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 18:49, 23 September 2021 (UTC)

I'll be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 18:49, 23 September 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• Comma after "The event had a total prize pool of €38,000"
• Comma after "The men's event was won by Jayson Shaw"
• Switch the first two sentences of the second paragraph for better flow (e.g. defending champion eliminated → new winner)
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:13, 24 September 2021 (UTC)

Tournament format

• Why is the name of the hotel italicized here?
• Specify in this section that it's nine-ball pool, which is mentioned in the lede but not in the body
• Not a fan of the semi-colon after "double-elimination tournament", as the second half is not actually an independent clause.
• Move "7–5" to after "Marharyta Fefilava" rather than at the end of the sentence, for better clarity
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:13, 24 September 2021 (UTC)

Prize fund

• "both of the winners of the event" → "the winner of each event"; otherwise it could be read that there were two winners per event
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:13, 24 September 2021 (UTC)

Tournament summary

• Is it "losers round" or "loser's round"? Both are used at different points
• Comma after "Oliwia Zalewska"
• Remove comma after "completed two 7–6 victories"
• "defeated" used twice in the sentence beginning "Having defeated Bojana Sarac" and is used again in the next sentence. Should use a synonym to break up flow
• Per MOS:CAPTION, since it's a complete sentence, the caption should end with a period
• No comma needed after "Ouschan won the final"
• Hyphen to en dash in the last sentence
  • all done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:24, 24 September 2021 (UTC)

Results

• Why is one a "competition" and the other is an "event"?
  • fixed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:24, 24 September 2021 (UTC)

References

• Work needed in reference [2]
• Sometimes a publisher is given for epbf.com, sometimes not
  • Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:27, 24 September 2021 (UTC)

General comments

• No stability concerns within the revision history
• One photo, relevant and properly licensed
• Per MOS:IMAGELOCATION, the photo used should probably be on the right side
  • I was working on It is often preferable to place images of people so that they "look" toward the text, but do not achieve this by reversing the image, which creates a false presentation, which is why it's on the left, but I can't say I care either way. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:26, 24 September 2021 (UTC)
• Earwig score looks great at 2.9%

That's all I have! Ping me if you have any questions. — GhostRiver 19:01, 23 September 2021 (UTC)

All done GhostRiver. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 10:31, 24 September 2021 (UTC)

Looks good to me, thanks! — GhostRiver 13:42, 24 September 2021 (UTC)