Talk:2016 Berlin ePrix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 17:50, 29 April 2018 (UTC)

Opening for discussion. Courcelles (talk) 17:50, 29 April 2018 (UTC)

• " He held the lead through the mandatory pit stops in which drivers switched into a second car to win the race. " This sentence needs more punctuation.
• "with the pit lane on Karl-Marx-Allee and goes around Strausberger Platz and Alexanderplatz." The pit lane gpoes around these squares? Or the course does? Either way, clarity is needed.
• "was sixth points behind in the battle for the position". Six, I think?
• "The deal was confirmed in the week before the race and was originally slated to be World Endurance Championship driver Adam Carroll but the agreement fell apart." Source?
• If Qualifying was on Saturday and practice eon Sunday, why do we talk about practice first?
• "di Grassi was in a tight bunch of cars consisting of Vergne and Prost in fifth." They all can't be in fifth, who was in that position?
• "the pressure caused Vergne to clout the bollards at the chicane." This sentence literally has no meaning to me. Possible to rewrite in ordinary language?
• You're missing a word in "Buemi revealed that allowed Vergne to pass him and attacked him when the latter had used up more electrical energy. "

• Compelling read, on a short hold. Courcelles (talk) 18:42, 29 April 2018 (UTC)
  • @Courcelles: Thanks again for another review. All of your queries have been addressed and I have made some other edits for the purposes of clarity. MWright96 (talk) 19:23, 29 April 2018 (UTC)

• • • All looks good, promoting. Courcelles (talk) 19:29, 29 April 2018 (UTC)