Talk:1966 NASA T-38 crash/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Hawkeye7 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Resident Mario (talk · contribs) 04:17, 13 July 2012 (UTC) Nice, short article. ResMar 04:17, 13 July 2012 (UTC)
- Lead
- The first sentence should be reconfigured to the more standard "The X was when Y happened".
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC)
- The lead should mention the weather conditions at the time of the accident.
- Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC)
- Infobox
- I don't think "Crashed into building" is an accident type in the way Engine Failure on Take-Off or Controlled flight into terrain would be.
- The exact time of the crash is not mentioned past the infobox, and should be cited there.
- Added to article. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC)
- The crash
- By the roof, do you mean the building roof, or the plane roof?
- Re-worded to make this unambiguous. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC)
- Investigation and aftermath
- What do you mean by "predictably"?
- Delete word. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC)
- All issues addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 09:36, 13 July 2012 (UTC)