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The End (Red Dwarf episode)

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I've listed this article for peer review because it has come a long way from its Stub class in November 2007. I beleive it is time for it to be reviewed for any problems before a GA nomination. Thanks, Nreive (talk) 10:28, 29 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The bit about the slime coming home should be a quote rather than prose. The image caption could be clearer - perhaps mention in the lead. The bit about Rimmer being resurrected as a hologramatic isn't clear - I thought the word was hologram? What's the Red Dwarf smegazine - a fan zine? Forgive me for asking this, but is it a reliable source? -Malkinann (talk) 23:14, 29 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comments. I've made the changes to the issues as pointed out. Red Dwarf smegazine was a Fleetway Editions publication from the early 1990s. It contained comic strips, news, interviews etc. on Red Dwarf. I suppose it's as reliable as any other magazine source. Nreive (talk) 09:20, 30 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article on a series I have heard of but never seem, here are some suggestions for improvement:

The lead needs to be expanded to meet WP:LEAD. My rule of thumb is that all the headers should be mentioned in some way in the lead - so Casting is not in the lead and the Production and Reception seem under-represented - see WP:WEIGHT too.
Avoid needless repetition "the script" is in every sentence but one in the "Writing" section.
I would also repeat the writers' full names in the first sentence of "Writing"
Provide context for the reader - I do not undertand this Craig Charles was sent the script by Paul Jackson because of the concern that the character of the Cat might be seen as racist, and that he was also considered for the role.[7] see WP:PCR
What are skutters? Explain please - in Changes specific to "The End" include bluescreen elements added to the opening scene with the skutters placed in the foreground of Rimmer and Lister and silhouettes of the crew's heads were added to the foreground of George McIntyre's funeral scene.[27]
A copy edit would help - there are a few places that could be smoother.
Seems fairly close to GA to me - I note that Red Dwarf is already GA and may be a good model article. There are other television episode articles that are GA and FA that may also be models.

Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 01:32, 3 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I will look through the article again in the next few days for copy edit issues. Nreive (talk) 08:13, 5 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]