Wikipedia:Peer review/Oxford/archive1

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I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to know how it could be improved.


Thanks, TwentiethApril1986 (talk) 14:55, 16 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Some basic suggestions to get you going.

  • Check out Navenby. It just recently made featured status and is a good model to base your editing on.
  • Expand the lead, per WP:LEAD.
  • You have several sections which are simply bullet lists. For GA or FA you should be looking to make this into engaging or even brilliant prose.
  • Go easy on the images, on my browser, some actually overlap. Judicious use and placement so as not to go over the top should be considered.
  • For some of the commercial areas, just select the major ones to discuss, no need to list every single area. Same with cinemas and theatres - this isn't an alamanac, it's an encyclopaedia so it should really contain only items of note with justification.
  • More citations are needed, see Navenby for a good example of how many you'd expect in a featured article!

There's a lot you can do already but feel free to get in touch if you need more advice. The Rambling Man (talk) 15:09, 19 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]