Talk:Fredrik Elfving

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Reviewer: Aircorn (talk · contribs) 06:39, 8 July 2021 (UTC)Reply


Will take this one on. Aircorn (talk) 06:39, 8 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

So I actually started reviewing this on my phone and then accidentally deleted it. Anyway here we go with take two. First it is excellently written. Interesting and seems to cover his life well, without getting bogged down in details. I am unable to check many of the references due to my lack of secondary language skills, so will assume good faith with most. They all look reliable. I will leave a few comments below, they are not necessarily requirements, but a I would appreciate a response to each even if it is just to say you disagree. Some might just be from my ignorance

  • what does order of estates mean?
  • his eldest sister became an author much later. Later than what?
  • Removed this bit. Was trying to allude to the fact that she didn't publish her first work until her fifties, but that detail is better left for her (eventual) article. Esculenta (talk) 17:34, 15 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • gave up on his plan after a couple of years. The next year he had decided on botany, so not sure how the couple of years fits in
  • fierce competition. This sounds a bit like they were pitted against one another in some sort of game or trial.
  • Removed "fierce". Details about the "competition" are in Vainio's article. but I left them out of here as this incident didn't really negatively affect Elfving's later life unlike it did with Vainio. Esculenta (talk) 17:34, 15 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • The apostles of civilisation paragraph is a little unclear. Don’t know how Vyborg nation fits in. Maybe more background needed and maybe a bit more layman speed for the non Finnish.
  • similar with the language issue. I know it is wiki linked, but a short description might help as issue is vague. It also took me a few reads to realise that the second chair was for a Finnish speaker. This confused me a bit as I am not clear on why this would be necessary as wouldn’t Elfving speak Finnish as well?
  • Not sure if Elfving spoke Finnish ... he probably did, but perhaps not well enough to give university-level lectures in that language. Have hopefully clarified this paragraph. Esculenta (talk) 17:34, 15 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • views on lichens. I think it would help to explain duality of lichens first time it is mentioned. Also from my first read through I thought Elfving was supporting the continually repeated accident theory, which confused me on why he was looking for genetic links. It might help to posit the current thinking if it can fit in as you start by saying his other research has stood the test of time, which suggests this hasn’t, yet the rebuttals all come from his time.
  • developed university teaching. I think this could be made clearer. It reads a bit awkward, although I get the intention. Maybe something like developed University courses, or methods of teaching botany at university
  • there are two biographies in further reading. Is there any reason they are not used a references. I see the same author is used extensively with another work, so presumably they are reliable?
  • the lead is excellent. Still not sure about fierce competition.

Great work. I think these are all minor issues. Doing this on my iPad as am away from the computer, so apologies for the formatting. Aircorn (talk) 02:21, 9 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Thanks kindly for the review. I will work on these suggestions and get back to you. Esculenta (talk) 14:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • The line in Further Reading. I know it is just so we don't repeat Elfving, but I do think it would look better having his name (or not having his name at all and moving the year.
  • Okay. Just never come across it myself before.
  • Nothing much on earwig [1]