Talk:Cape sparrow/GA1
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 20:58, 2 June 2013 (UTC)
- Hi, I will review this article. FunkMonk (talk) 20:58, 2 June 2013 (UTC)
- "and the male has some black and white markings." Maybe add "black and white markings on its head and neck"?
- Added. —innotata 16:59, 3 June 2013 (UTC)
- "been recorded declining significantly" Looks a bit awkward. To decline?
- Reworded. —innotata 20:18, 3 June 2013 (UTC)
- "but in these areas has such a low reproductive success that populations cannot be maintained without immigration." Why?
- Vineyards are not optimal habitat, the details are in papers I can't access. Edited. —innotata 18:35, 7 June 2013 (UTC)
- The image under taxonomy seems a bit misplaced. Perhaps better under habitat or description?
- There only really are relevant images for the behaviour section, so I just added extra photos. But I've moved it to dist/habitat and added an image of a male seen from the front to description. —innotata 20:06, 3 June 2013 (UTC)
- "which is sometimes merged with melanurus" Synonymised with would be more accurate, and perhaps less ambiguous.
- Edited. —innotata 16:59, 3 June 2013 (UTC)
- "There are reports by birdwatchers in suburban areas of South Africa of both increases in some regions" Specify what is being increased.
- Increases and decreases: I cut the "both". —innotata 19:56, 3 June 2013 (UTC)
- "Instances of hybridisation with the House Sparrow,[7] the Southern Grey-headed Sparrow, and the Sudan Golden Sparrow have been reported.[27]" Infertile?
- Presumably, but this isn't in the sources I found. —innotata 16:59, 3 June 2013 (UTC)
- "Clutches are larger further south, and during the peak of the breeding season." Why?
- New edits are nice. If the answers to my questions can't be found at all, it won't hold the promotion back, of course. FunkMonk (talk) 04:33, 4 June 2013 (UTC)
- I think I've addressed all your issues above. —innotata 18:41, 7 June 2013 (UTC)
- Nice, passed then! FunkMonk (talk) 19:29, 7 June 2013 (UTC)
- I think I've addressed all your issues above. —innotata 18:41, 7 June 2013 (UTC)
- New edits are nice. If the answers to my questions can't be found at all, it won't hold the promotion back, of course. FunkMonk (talk) 04:33, 4 June 2013 (UTC)