Happyjujugirl

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If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to contact me on my talk page. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:12, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

Wong Chun-chun

Minor revisions needed. This is an excellent start! Nice lead paragraph and good variety of high-quality sources. Before moving this to mainspace, I recommend that you make the following minor revisions:

• The footnote numbers should go after the period or other punctuation.
• Fix the spacing – in some places there are too many spaces and other places a space is missing.
• Fix the red errors in the references section.
• When you cite a reference with pages, cite the particular page number.
• Break the Career section up into more small paragraphs.
• Add Awards section.

Chronophoto (talk) 17:26, 22 October 2019 (UTC)

Notes

Hi! I reviewed your draft. I think that you overall have a good draft here - there are still some things to work on but I think that you're on the right track. If you know Chinese you may want to review the Chinese Wikipedia entry to see if there's anything listed there that isn't here. And if you're fluent enough, you may want to translate your work into Chinese since it does look like you have content that isn't on the Chinese page, at least from what I can see based on Google Translate. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 19:59, 23 October 2019 (UTC)

Peer Reviewing: Barbara Wong Chun-chun

I wasn't assigned to edit your article, but one of the two I was assigned had nothing written for it, so I hope it's okay that I edited yours!

Overall, the article is good, but there a few a changes I wanted to make. Mostly, I went in and edited the grammar and sentence structure.

I edited little bits here and there, but the most significant changes were:

"After graduation, ... Hong Kong as a disc jockey.", and "In 1993, Wong moved to New York to further her studies. She then graduated ... and her graduation work HUGO was selected as an NYU Best Student Film". The rest of the changes I made follow this sort of editing, just going into improve fluidity via sentence structure and grammar.

The only other thing I would suggest is maybe trying to bulk up the article a bit more. You've found a lot of good sources so far, but if you have the chance to find anything more before the final due date and add it in, I think it would help to quantify the article some more!

I also noticed Shalor made the point of, if you're comfortable with it, adding to the Chinese version of the same page as you have information not included there. I second this idea, but only if you're comfortable/capable! Otherwise, job well done! :)

Patelcamps4608 (talk) 18:29, 3 November 2019 (UTC)Patelcamps4608

@Patelcamps4608:

Hi! Thank you for editing my Wikipedia page, and the suggestions are very helpful.

However, I noticed that you move my punctuations after footnote numbers, but I am pretty sure that the footnote numbers should follow the punctuations. I’m sorry I have to move them back. Thank you again for your editing and advice!!

Happyjujugirl (talk) 20:01, 3 November 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review

Hi!

First, I really appreciated all the inter-wikipedia links you were able to use throughout your article, they are consistent and appropriate. It reads really well and there's a clear creative element to it, insofar as it flows logically while still being interesting! One critic I might add to this though, is that it sometimes reads as a little casual, for example when you wrote "This film got the attention of the Hong Kong film industry and went on to win..." Moreover, there are also some grammatical errors that I will go in an edit for you, for example: "After that, Wong continued to shaping Hongkong community and people in the film and filmed" the sentence is a little awkward as well. I also think it might have been interesting to elaborate on why this director is directing the kind of political pieces she is making regarding body image and exploring sex and sexuality; and maybe what her upcoming project(s) are because she seems to be consistently making film! Also a picture would have been great as well (although I understand how tricky it is to add photos)! Also the link for your 8th source link doesn't work! Overall, it is a comprehensive article and you found a lot of really good sources! Also, congratulations on creating the page for this director, it seems like a daunting task and you did a great job!

--Cactus0195 (talk) 04:09, 5 November 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review Yourstrulyy

Overall, a great start to your page. In the education section, you never mention what exactly she studied in school and what degree she graduated with. I think if you can add that it would be great. I also feel as if for your filmography section where you mention her work as a director, actress, and scriptwriter that it can be done in a chart for a better visual. As well as for the description of truth or dare I feel as if you could have explained a little more because you just mentioned it was about 6 youths, but what exactly about them? I found no spelling mistakes in your article so that’s great as you spent time to ensure your grammar and spelling were correct. Just take some time to review it again before the final submission to use some of the suggestions I had. Good luck! Yourstrulyy (talk) 05:34, 5 November 2019 (UTC) Yourstrulyy