Talk:Hundred Years' War, 1345–1347/GA1

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Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 04:00, 19 September 2021 (UTC)Reply


Initial notice

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I will review this article for GA class. Djmaschek (talk) 04:00, 19 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hi Djmaschek and many thanks for the review. I have, I think, addressed all of your comments. Gog the Mild (talk) 12:27, 20 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

Review 1

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Overall, it's a nice job. Here is my review. If I see anything else, I will let you know. Djmaschek (talk) 03:10, 20 September 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • Introduction:
    • Paragraph 3: "to 20 miles from Paris" > "to within 20 mi (32.2 km) from Paris". I see that you use the convert (cvt) tag, but missed it here.
Done.
    • Paragraph 3: There's nothing technically wrong with the sentence beginning with "The English army then turned north...", but it might be more readable if the date was at the end.
Done.
    • Paragraph 3: "4 September" > "4 September 1346". (I was looking around for a year date.)
Done.
    • Paragraph 4: "The war eventually ended in 1453, while Calais served" > Suggestion: "The war eventually ended in 1453 with the English expelled from all of France territory except Calais, which served".
Good idea. Done.
  • Background:
    • Paragraph 2: "In 1340 Edward , as" > "In 1340 Edward, as" (space)
Done.
  • Plans:
    • There are two lines between Background and Plans sections. (?)
One removed.
    • Paragraph 2: "South-western France". (In Background paragraph 1 south western France is rendered without the dash. Whether dash or no dash, please be consistent throughout.)
It is consistent. I use "south western", but when using the two words as a compound adjective, the rules of English grammar require a hyphen. (As in "the English-led invasion" and "the English led the invasion" not being inconsistent.)
  • Crecy campaign:
    • Paragraph 2: "north and become trapped" > "north and became trapped"
Done..
  • Battle of Crecy:
    • Paragraph 2: "fleeing Italians" (There is no context for this.) Suggestion: "fleeing crossbowmen" (The reader may understand this was the result of the archery exchange.)
I have added context to the preceding paragraph instead.
  • Battle of Neville's Cross:
    • Please give the year date (1346).
Done
  • Fall of Calais:
    • Even though the title is 1347, it would be helpful to add the date after "During March and April".
Done.
    • There is a stray "</ref>" after citation 95.
Removed.

GA class

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It looks good. I didn't follow the argument about the dash, but I'm OK with that. The maps were very helpful. Djmaschek (talk) 15:27, 20 September 2021 (UTC)Reply